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ROUND THREE / BEST STORY SUMMARY SUBMISSIONS
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Holli Bertram
Ann Arbor, MI |
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CURSES!
(Paranormal)
Story Summary:
Julie Dancer, single mom of a college student, is looking
forward to a quiet midlife after the nonstop juggling act of working while
raising her daughter. When Harrison Chevalier claims they must have sex to
break a curse, Julie figures he's forgotten to take his meds. However, a
single kiss from Harry triggers powers dormant within her. At least that's
Harry's explanation for why she heats up and starts glowing like a
supernova. Julie suspects menopause.
It turns out that Harry is not just a nutcase with a really bad pickup
line. He's leader of a community of powerful energy wielders. Sex with
Julie will meld their powers. Together they can dissolve the curse that
will eventually destroy Harry's free will and bring chaos to both their
worlds. Problem is, Julie thinks he's delusional.
Julie soon finds her empty nest crowded with a leather-clad guardian, a man
who turns into an owl and a vengeful shadow walker intent on keeping her
from breaking the curse. OK, so maybe there is more to the world than she
realized.
Despite the chemistry between them, Julie knows nothing about the community
or her power to wield energy. Harry knows nothing about family or his power
to love. But when Julie's daughter is kidnapped, they embark on a journey
that takes them to hell and back (literally) -- a journey that that leads
Julie to a discovery that could save the world but destroy the man she's
grown to love.
Judges' Comments:
Flavia Knightsbridge -- My head hurts reading this entry. You have way too much stuff going on here. Don't just throw a bunch of wacky paranormal high jinks into a plot like last night's leftovers. Make sure your story has a solid, substantial core.
Hilary Ross -- Nice straightforward plot with a refreshing touch of humor.
Leslie Kazanjian -- Single mom Julie Dancer clearly hits her midlife crisis with a bang. Her "empty nest" overcrowded by otherworldly creatures, a kook named Harry unleashing her inner powers with his kiss ... sounds like a hoot and a half -- fun, witty and fabulous!
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Mel Hiers
Smyrna, TN |
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Round Three Elimination
VOICE OF THE BARD
(Contemporary Fantasy)
Story Summary:
Anna Martin is comfortable with change until her boss tells her he's
transferring her from her transient position as a temp with the Bard Corps
to a permanent assignment in the Midwest. Anna never wanted her own
district, but barding, keeping mythics secret and humans safe, is the only
thing she's ever wanted to do, the only thing she knows, so she takes the
position.
Anna grew up in her district before she knew of mythics and bards. She blew
town as a teen and dreads going back. But when she arrives, small-town life
isn't what she remembers or expects. The Native American creature that
murdered Red, her predecessor, has been slaughtering mythics for centuries.
Between the fly-fairy prisoner left over from her last temp assignment and
the houseful of people she inherited, she can never get a moment to
herself.
And then there's Dave, the cute mechanic next door. He's haunted by the
ghost of his dead wife and smells like magic, yet he seems unaware of the
existence of mythics. It's obvious he's interested in Anna, and Anna is
drawn to him, but her job makes a relationship with anyone, mythic or
human, impossible.
Anna will have to straddle two cultures and face the family she left behind
to protect her people. And perhaps, along the way, she will forge a path
around impossible to find happiness.
Judges' Comments:
Flavia Knightsbridge -- Nice. This sounds like a fresh spin on the usual paranormal plots and Anna
reads like she could be a captivating and relatable heroine.
Hilary Ross -- The plot itself, in spite of the mythics, sounds fairly ordinary.
Leslie Kazanjian -- Who says you can't go home again? This small-town story of a Midwestern
"mythic," a magical mechanic and their attempt to straddle cultures and
"forge a path around impossible to happiness" sounds heartfelt and
endearing.
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Anitra Lynn McLeod
Salt Lake City, UT |
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Round Three Elimination
THIEF
(Futuristic Western)
Story Summary:
Jace Lawless lets out a long-suffering sigh when the mysterious beauty
demands his surrender. Nothing comes easy but why does everything have to
be so damn difficult? Jace wants to salvage the derelict ship but
apparently, she has the same idea. He's astounded when Kraft agrees to
split the haul, saying there is honor among thieves.
Haunted by her hungry eyes, Jace is stunned when a month later, a drugged
Kraft is for sale as a cook-whore. Jace can't afford her outrageous price
but honor compels him to rescue her. However, Kraft is no damsel in
distress. Even without her blades and guns strapped to her sexy hips, Kraft
radiates power and authority. Only her honor and the debt she must repay
restrains her.
When Kraft isn't cooking, she's flirting shamelessly, but Jace isn't ready
to love again. The InnerWorld Government (IWOG) unleashed a virus that
killed his family and he's afraid anything he builds they will destroy.
Resisting the provocative Kraft proves impossible but once Jace surrenders
his heart, he's devastated when he discovers Kraft is a fugitive IWOG
assassin. How could he love a woman who worked for the vicious scum
responsible for destroying his family? And harboring an IWOG fugitive might
destroy what little he managed to gain.
Trapped between honor, love and vengeance, Jace must decide if he'll live
ensnared in his past or embrace an uncertain future with a woman who
embodies all he longs for yet everything he loathes.
Judges' Comments:
Flavia Knightsbridge -- Watch the overblown language. The hungry eyes, sexy hips and long-suffering
sighs here smack of adjective addiction. But if you keep the purple prose
in check, fans may enjoy the way you're taking the traditional pirate ship
romance and transplanting it to the space age.
Hilary Ross -- Complicated, but classic conflict of love between enemies.
Leslie Kazanjian -- She's "all he longs for yet everything he loathes" -- how could the
delicious, delirious, yet deadly conflict between honor, love and vengeance
that sexy, haunted Jace faces prove anything but passionate, provocative
and powerful?
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Trish Milburn
Hermitage, TN |
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OUT OF SIGHT
(Paranormal)
Story Summary:
Patrol officer Jenna McCay is off duty and unarmed in a bank when a robber
picks that moment to help himself to some quick cash. She's forced to use
her ability to make herself invisible to disarm him. Though her transition
isn't seen by anyone inside the bank, the security camera records it. The
next thing she knows an agent from an unnamed government agency arrives at
her door with a proposition she can't refuse. That is if she wants to
uncover the truth about her father, a covert ops soldier who went missing
15 years ago.
Agent Daniel Webster - yes, that's his real name - and his bosses get their
way when they offer information about her father in exchange for Jenna's
services. Jenna goes "undercover" at the White House to identify the
insider who is sending death threats to the president. Frustration ensues
-- with her inability to finger the perpetrator, the agency's stinginess
with information and her dangerous attraction to Daniel. Following false
leads, Jenna is kidnapped, shot at and, no kidding, threatened with
dissection. But what scares her most is her growing attraction to Daniel
even though she's not sure she can trust him.
Judges' Comments:
Flavia Knightsbridge -- This kind of simple but engaging story premise strikes the right balance.
It elevates the action/suspense thriller with a bit of paranormal but is
still grounded enough to appeal to a wide audience.
Hilary Ross -- Sounds like a pretty good thriller.
Leslie Kazanjian -- No matter where she goes, danger seems to find this invisible woman, so her
story promises to supply plenty of adventure and intrigue.
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Helen Scott Taylor
Plymouth, Devon, UK |
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THE MAGIC KNOT
(Paranormal)
Story Summary:
A London accountant is searching for her past and a bad-boy Irish fairy is
running away from his. When their paths meet in the mystical depths of
rural Cornwall the ancient power of the Magic Knot binds their destinies.
To discover why she has always felt like an outsider, Rosenwyn Tremain
returns to her birthplace seeking answers. Instead of the "normal" father
she's dreamed of finding, she discovers he's an evil druid who has
magically imprisoned a whole race of fairies on tarot cards. When Rose
learns she is their fairy queen, she realizes she can never return to her
ordinary life, and asks exiled Irish fairy Niall O'Connor for help to free
her people. Betrayed by those who should have cared for him as a child,
Niall is emotionally distant until Rose accidentally forges a mystical
lovers' bond with him. Niall's dark, dangerous appearance flutters thrills
of longing through her, but she doesn't know if she can trust him.
Especially when her tarot cards warn he will stab her in the back.
Pushed to the limit of endurance in their search for the secret fairy lore
to release the prisoners, Rose and Niall must leave behind the scars of the
past and learn to trust each other or lose everything they've come to hold
dear.
Judges' Comments:
Flavia Knightsbridge -- She wants to rescue her people from ... a pack of tarot cards? Seriously?
And how did a druid give birth to a fairy queen anyway?
Hilary Ross -- Seems like an engaging enough storyline.
Leslie Kazanjian -- The bond between a London accountant and her bad-boy Irish fairy might be
mystical, but their struggles to overcome the painful past and forge a more
loving future resonate with universal human longings.
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Mai Christy Thao
Chester, SC |
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PRINCE OF DARKNESS
(Paranormal)
Story Summary:
Stripped of her sight, Anoria Leikin vows never to use the magick gifted
her by the fates, blaming it for the loss of her beloved Kym'rin. Once, she
gave up all for love. Now she craves more than anything to forget her past
and be left alone. But a stranger has intruded in the safe haven of her
forest and threatens the hard-earned peace she's finally found. He stirs
buried memories and elicits emotions she's hidden from herself. Even blind,
she believes the stranger to be Kym'rin. But this new Kym'rin is distant
and secretive. Dangerous.
Cursed for a crime he did not commit, Prince Kym'rin Rainyll has no desire
to rectify the belief that he is dead. When an ancient draconic being is
released into their land and sets his eyes on the magick that thrives
inside Anoria, Kym'rin is forced to reveal his identity to protect the
woman he's always loved. But he guards a deadly secret. As an altercation
of his curse, an ancient evil grows inside him. Should he give in to the
darkness, it could destroy everyone, including Anoria. When he discovers
the only way to defeat the dragon is to accept his darkness, will he trade
his soul or risk losing the one woman worth dying for?
Judges' Comments:
Flavia Knightsbridge -- This is a tried-and-true epic fantasy plot, a solid story not cluttered up
with gimmicks or machinations. Well done.
Hilary Ross -- The various forms of evil are confusing, especially so since the word
"altercation" makes no sense to me.
Leslie Kazanjian -- Anoria and Kym'rin give new meaning to the expression "love is blind," and
in the process of facing down danger and destruction in the name of that
love, they champion the struggles of star-crossed lovers everywhere.
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